Tuesday, June 08, 2010

Summer's In The Air

so, this is how it happens...

a train pulled up and, in pavlovian mode, you hopped in. maybe you came running down the stairs and barely made it through the doors or, perhaps, you were exhausted after a long day at work and didn't give stepping in a second thought. it was rush hour and yet the car was suprisingly empty - there were empty seats all over the place - in fact almost the entire car was empty. fantastic, you thought, you'll be getting a seat all the way home. and then a thought makes it way through the tired fog covering your brain - how can this be? how can you have so many seats during rush hour? a moment too late you realise that there is something wrong. something terribly wrong. you lurch towards the train doors but reach them just as they squeak shut. you are trapped. you try not to, but you have to inhale.

and nearly pass out. the stench seems to be an impossibility. what could have come together to create this toxic odour? you look around and spot the mass of garbage bags piled around a seat and, in the middle of it all, a grey form. it is always grey colour cannot live among such smells. it dies and leaves behind only its shadow - like ashes after a cremation. you see a few people huddled on the opposite end of the train car. they are they ones who have decided they are going to try to survive the ride, in the name of a seat. their feet hurt enough that they are willing to let some nose hairs get burnt away for a little bit of rest. and then, there are those like you, squeezed against the train doors, trying (without any luck) to take in wisps of air from the tunnel outside. others try to find a scarf, sweater or piece of tissue to breathe into, hoping that the material will filter the poison out of the air. you all just have to last until the next stop. then you can dash out and run to the next car.

you make it and as you make your escape, and breathe in the less poisonous air of the subway, you see others jump on, lunge towards the empty seats. you see that familiar look of relief turn into horror as the train doors close...

5 comments:

dodo said...

What a nightmare! :-(

You have a special way of describing scenes and situations, a personal style- i always enjoy reading them.

Ekwa MO said...

Ahh yes! I've certainly been there!

fb said...

Fantastic writing.

Lured back...

What is the picture in the post below?

pandave said...

ah dodo, thank you! i feel the same about your picture stories!

LOL!, Eks, probably way way too many times!

FB - so glad to see you back! i shall try to do what i can to keep you around. The photo is the behind of a warthog - i spotted it in a bar and was rather tickled by the view

Prettylyf said...

You do have a way with words as I've always told ya. You've a way to define and paint a very clear and impeccable picture of a situation that takes me/us as your readers to it.

I hope you're enjoying the summer!!!